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"...Terrific
dialogue... tackle an overwhelming amount of material, huge
topics like love, mortality, suicide,
persona"
---Julie Danho
"...images are
clear... metaphors are well thought out and fresh. It is a very
lyrical piece... some of the philosophy... is a bit stale and
unoriginal" ---Patricia Urban
"...great point
that the events in life do not make one plot... Although I
really like the idea of the different plots working together to
form one everyday life, I was somewhat
confused..."
---Joe Schneider
"...Never did
it lack creativity and at times it was quite insightful"
---Josh Harmon
"...a very dark
piece... There were moments when the piece seemed to lighten a
bit, but Tom stayed true to his
purpose" ---Matthew
Prestage
"Tom's paper
had a diary feeling to it that I liked... overall dark... a
small bit of Tom's life over one summer working at a Chinese
restaurant and how he experienced boredom and maybe love in his
small town" ---Supen Phommalee
"...few people
would put up with the confusion and finish the work" ---Pat
Tebben
"Wow! This is a
great story! I loved it!... Kind of like The Catcher in the
Rye... It was dark, and... your thoughts are scary to
me" ---Kim Allen
"...manages to
demonstrate Tom's fear of uncertainty... captured Tom's apparent
feelings toward life in
general"
---Pat May
"...a very bold
essay to expose so much of yourself and your thoughts... take on
some very serious issues, like suicide, the meaning of life,
violence, and love, and without preaching to the
reader"
---Ginny Keyes
"...incredible
use of metaphor and simile... the manner in which you use the
dialogue, almost as a replacement for character
description" ---Nicole Craven
"I found your
imagery beautiful... Overall I was very confused of your intent
with this
piece"
---Lauren Hartley
"...very
lyrical language... Your elegant language and acute and
perceptive observations work
well"
---Ashley Hoffman
"...You are
writing about some dark stuff, but you never exploit those
people for the sake of your story... Refreshing. Funny way to
describe something dealing with suicidal thoughts... unique:
it's totally you" ---Amber
J. Terzi
"...a little
disconnected... you aren't afraid to show your opinion"
---Sarah Grondin
"...chaotic and
rapidly changing. This lends to a style and uniqueness to the
writing... also leads to some confusion in
parts"
---Eric Kane
"...begins
rather slowly... Overall an incredible essay"
---Tiffany Schaeffer |
